Ah! I love Narcissa as Quidditch star -- you know Draco got it from somewhere, and somehow Lucius just doesn't seem the type. And it hints at the quiet offscreen tragedy that boxes up this Narcissa into present day Narcissa. I also like that you've made Narcissa/Lucius not just a business affair, at least on his side. (Are you keeping your Narcissa characterization from your Eye of the Storm piece here?)

I really like here the sense of the world pressing in on Andromeda from all sides, unrelentingly. Love watching it build.