Oh, this was almost painful to read. You got everything just so right. Everything felt real. Sirius's conversation with Harry, Harry's babbling, Sirius's great plans for him. And then when Remus came - ouch. Really tragic. Sirius's conflicting emotions when he saw Remus retching were wonderfully portrayed. And I could see it all happening: Weary and dirty Remus leaning in the door ... The image was really, really good.