But Remus! Oh, Remus. He's portrayed so well, so vividly. Jo, above, has said it better than I could. And then, in the middle of it you drop something like “I like the gnomes,” he said mildly. “If you leave them alone long enough they discover democracy.” How could anyone not adore you for it?
And oh, Luna. :D
I like the idea of all the members sending Remus postcards, even though he probably never was close to any of them - or maybe even because of that. He's strong and resilient, but in a reassuring, comforting way, that makes him the person one is most likely to turn to. And I love the details you infuse in your story, that make them feel much more real - and realistic than most. In this case an example could be He took the mugs through to the kitchen, wrinkling his nose at the stink of the Wolfsbane warming on the hob. I like your characterization of Harry, just like the one you have of Alice (http://pics.livejournal.com/kasche/pic/000296z8). But the goblin statue! That stole my heart. (In fact, if you pay attention, it's not anymore in the place you left it last. If you try to take it away from the mini-goblin you'll probably be covered in insults.)
“It’s great,” Harry said, bending over it again. “Just like a minature Malfoy. Oy, ferret-face, Dementors ate your Daddy!”
“Fuck your nostrils, toad-arse!”
That's one scene that had me in fits of giggles - literally. It's just such a visual scene - I can see Harry's face like it was in front of me, you know?
And Sirius. I love how you drop hints until you know what is going to happen, you can't wait for it to happen, but you still love every single second of the waiting. When I was reading the passage where you see him marking his territory I laughed and smiled in pure delight. (And you ended the story in the best way possible.)
What bugs is that I damn can't draw it, though. I can't give away the ending like that!
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But Remus! Oh, Remus. He's portrayed so well, so vividly. Jo, above, has said it better than I could. And then, in the middle of it you drop something like “I like the gnomes,” he said mildly. “If you leave them alone long enough they discover democracy.” How could anyone not adore you for it?
And oh, Luna. :D
I like the idea of all the members sending Remus postcards, even though he probably never was close to any of them - or maybe even because of that. He's strong and resilient, but in a reassuring, comforting way, that makes him the person one is most likely to turn to. And I love the details you infuse in your story, that make them feel much more real - and realistic than most. In this case an example could be He took the mugs through to the kitchen, wrinkling his nose at the stink of the Wolfsbane warming on the hob. I like your characterization of Harry, just like the one you have of Alice (http://pics.livejournal.com/kasche/pic/000296z8). But the goblin statue! That stole my heart. (In fact, if you pay attention, it's not anymore in the place you left it last. If you try to take it away from the mini-goblin you'll probably be covered in insults.)
“It’s great,” Harry said, bending over it again. “Just like a minature Malfoy. Oy, ferret-face, Dementors ate your Daddy!”
“Fuck your nostrils, toad-arse!”
That's one scene that had me in fits of giggles - literally. It's just such a visual scene - I can see Harry's face like it was in front of me, you know?
And Sirius. I love how you drop hints until you know what is going to happen, you can't wait for it to happen, but you still love every single second of the waiting. When I was reading the passage where you see him marking his territory I laughed and smiled in pure delight. (And you ended the story in the best way possible.)
What bugs is that I damn can't draw it, though. I can't give away the ending like that!